A huge dragon lend over king's castle he was As angry as a lion and as he picked me he was powerful as a sun he was so bright that I started to slip the dragon start to slip.
He jump back up and start to try to take the crystal ball the crystal ball was to powerful.He start to fly around he came down like a rocket as he land on top of my castle I saw a smile in the core of my eyes he just want't to play. king was inside and the dragon stared to talk the dragon the dragon was in a spell had made the dragon the dragon said my name is Nick.Nick was a friend of the king but the dragon though that the king would never let him come back then he flew away forever and lived happily ever after.Thursday, 7 April 2016
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I like your writing but it is some parts don't make sene
ReplyDeleteI like your writing but it is some parts don't make sene
ReplyDeleteBonjour, my name is Troy and I am a student in room 8 at Waikowhai Primary School. I really like the ending when the dragon is so nice and you live happily ever after. It made me think of fairy tail stories with the happily ever after endings. Have you thought about re-reading or something because there was a couple words that didn’t make sense with the story. If you would like to see my learning, my blog is http://wpstroyw.blogspot.co.nz/.
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From Troy.