I have been learning about Persuasive writing with main points and elaboration. Main points are usually in the first sentence in each paragraph. Elaboration is what backs up your sentence.
Stop Scooters
In my opinion children should not be allowed to ride scooters at school during interval and lunchtime.
Scooters are fun to play on but could be very dangerous. Riders could lose control of their scooter when they're going fast the scooters are made of metal and are very solid. Scooters could be dangerous because it could knock over small children that might be running around.
Scooters dominate the playground. There is limited playground space in schools and scooters take over large areas, leaving less space for the others.
Often riders do not wear safety gear because they can’t be bothered.
Scooting is extremely unsafe in a crowded space. It can often result in head injuries. One trick involves spinning the scooter over the rider's head. This is extremely dangerous. I think that children should not scooter at morning tea and lunchtime.
I believe no schools should permit any kid to scooter in school.
Sincerely By Tori
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